It's a love song baby

Taking a short break from challenges to make a quick love song.

Lyrics

It's a love song baby
For the cool night headaches
For the twisted covers
Of my bed

It's a love song baby
For all those times
You know those times
The ones that overwhelm

It's a love song baby
For the clothes on the ground
For the smallest sound
That I can hear

It's a love song baby
It's a love song baby
It's a near rhyme
For all those times

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posted by ORthey (12 comments total)

Like the build-up through the song and to the end.
posted by quadog at 8:18 PM on November 20, 2008

Loverly.
posted by chococat at 10:14 PM on November 20, 2008

It's gorgeous ORthey - I find myself wanting the melody to change and develop and soar a bit more in the last two verses (or maybe in the harmony for the last two verses?) The melody seems to generally head downwards, whereas I keep wanting it to go up. Also, a tambourine to come in as it builds? :)

I wish, wish, wish I had as effortlessly moving a voice as yours. :)
posted by Ira_ at 1:45 PM on November 21, 2008

It's a love song baby


And a lovely one at that.
posted by micayetoca at 3:29 PM on November 21, 2008

Thanks, all! Ira_ - I know, it needs work, and I like your thoughts/suggestions a lot. Sometimes I hastily "finish" tunes that need more work out of... laziness? Stubbornness?
posted by ORthey at 4:01 PM on November 21, 2008

Hey ORthey, it's already one of my favourite songs on MeMu(?) as is! They are just some additional ideas, if you feel like playing around with it :) And it's great that you can finish tunes and let them go - I could do with being better at that!
posted by Ira_ at 5:16 PM on November 21, 2008

Forgive me, but I disagree. Sure you could do stuff to it, but man, if you played that on the back porch during an after party, you would be the king, like forever!
posted by snsranch at 5:21 PM on November 21, 2008

Listening again, I wouldn't change a thing about the melody - which is gorgeous - right up until the last three lines. I was wanting the melody for those three lines to rise more, before falling again to home on repeat.

But really, it's wonderful as is, so feel free to ignore me - it's just easier for me to have ideas for other people's songs than work on my own! :)

posted by Ira_ at 5:45 PM on November 21, 2008

Great song, as always. What is the new effect you seem to be using on your voice in these last two songs?

I like your falsetto! You could totally do a whole song with that.
posted by Corduroy at 6:01 PM on November 21, 2008

I love these lyrics!

(and the song too)
posted by csimpkins at 9:31 PM on November 21, 2008

Hmm... a whole song of falsetto?? Something I've always wanted to try, actually. Maybe I'll do it. Oh, and good ear on the vocals, corduroy - it's a different kind of reverb I've been trying. It seems to remove some of the flaws from my voice, which is good and bad at the same time.
posted by ORthey at 4:16 PM on November 22, 2008

Sounds like you're testing out this new reverb effect, so I'll say my honest opinion is I prefer the 'flawed' ORthey :)
posted by Corduroy at 12:05 AM on November 25, 2008