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The tenth track from Inchoatery, and the finale—a letter to the ex. Probably the most structurally complicated song on the whole album.

This was the last thing I wrote for the album, after the rest (including the next "epilogue" track) had been written and demoed; it's an attempt to tie the whole thing together narratively and provide some grounding of and complements to various references and loose ends from earlier songs.

This kept getting extra lyrics as the month went by, while I reworked the arrangement and tried to nail down what exactly I needed to introduce to the picture of their relationship before and during and after the breakup that wasn't already explicit in the earlier parts of the album.

Trying to work out the major sectional changes was fun and frustration; the move form 4 to 3 at the two-thirds point gave me more headaches than I'd like to admit.

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posted by cortex (7 comments total)

I think this works really well. The sections fit together, the instrumentation is spot-on, and it has this relentless, sort of restless, desperate tone that builds and builds. Nice.
posted by uncleozzy at 8:29 AM on March 23, 2010

This is now on my alarm-clock CD. Awesome stuff. Your lyrics remind me of a more-country but also awesome buddy of mine, actually.
posted by restless_nomad at 8:58 AM on March 23, 2010

Really well-constructed, and there are constantly changing things in the arrangement that keeps me tuned in. I like the lyrics too, they feel like stuff I shouldn't have access to, which is a great feel to have in a song.
posted by edlundart at 8:18 PM on March 23, 2010

This is really fine stuff, man.
posted by koeselitz at 1:52 AM on March 24, 2010

Wow... that's a real lyrical "opening a vein." Great stuff, I applaud your courage in putting that out there.
posted by dnash at 8:57 PM on March 24, 2010

As usual with the gut-spilling stuff, it's not really my story. In this case, no one's story in particular; the whole album is more a meditation on tropes of A Breakup than any sort of biography, let alone autobiography.

I'm glad that I write this stuff effectively and don't mean that as any sort of complaint. But I feel like it's only fair to be clear that it's fiction, not non-fiction.
posted by cortex at 9:05 PM on March 24, 2010

There is something so awesome about this, but there is also something that feeels off. I'm not one to critique music though. Thanks for the listen!
posted by lakerk at 2:01 PM on March 27, 2010