Sister
July 3, 2007 10:15 AM
First song ever written, and completed. Written/recorded in 2 hours flat. Fishing for feedback.
posted by sindas (10 comments total) 2 users marked this as a favorite
posted by sindas (10 comments total) 2 users marked this as a favorite
Not bad, pretty catchy, would listen again. I'm not musical so I can't give you any tips, but I like indie/shoegaze, fwiw.
posted by chlorus at 12:26 PM on July 3, 2007
posted by chlorus at 12:26 PM on July 3, 2007
First? Congrats! You're off to a fine start; it's a real groover. Hooked to death maybe, but that's a matter of context I reckon, and it's a good hook.
And I knew your handle looked familiar.
posted by cortex at 1:04 PM on July 3, 2007
And I knew your handle looked familiar.
posted by cortex at 1:04 PM on July 3, 2007
Hooked to death maybe, I was about to type, "That's where the guitar solo goes." Exactly when the solo started. But then the hook continued. Ha!
This is great. I imagine/hope we'll hear much more!
posted by snsranch at 1:40 PM on July 3, 2007
This is great. I imagine/hope we'll hear much more!
posted by snsranch at 1:40 PM on July 3, 2007
Dude, my first song written/recorded involved me trying not to drop the guitar. You're wayyyy ahead!
posted by ORthey at 5:52 PM on July 3, 2007
posted by ORthey at 5:52 PM on July 3, 2007
I really like the vocal production. There is great attitude in this. Your performance is good too although I'd like it more if it were slightly less "spoken-word"-like -- ie, cram a little more melody into the vocal.
My first song sounded like the theme song to a primitive hello kitty video game.
posted by edlundart at 6:52 PM on July 3, 2007
My first song sounded like the theme song to a primitive hello kitty video game.
posted by edlundart at 6:52 PM on July 3, 2007
Very nice, i dig. Only complaint is it's a bit dry, run each track though a bussed reverb and you'll be golden. Reminds me of brian jonestown massacre.
posted by waxboy at 12:29 AM on July 4, 2007
posted by waxboy at 12:29 AM on July 4, 2007
well, my first song... I'm still looking forward to it. Very efficient songwriting here. Write some more !
posted by nicolin at 2:13 AM on July 4, 2007
posted by nicolin at 2:13 AM on July 4, 2007
I love it, the chorus got a little old after it repeated so long but other than that great stuff.
posted by pwally at 3:53 PM on July 5, 2007
posted by pwally at 3:53 PM on July 5, 2007
You might want to work a bit on 'humanizing' the drum track a bit.
but otherwise, pretty good.
posted by dunkadunc at 1:13 AM on August 2, 2008
but otherwise, pretty good.
posted by dunkadunc at 1:13 AM on August 2, 2008
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posted by sindas at 10:16 AM on July 3, 2007