F**K you

July 12, 2006 12:53 PM

Another by my band Evening, this one is more on the grime side of things. Has some pretty nasty lyrics.

posted by grex (7 comments total) 1 user marked this as a favorite

That me rapping first (in case anyone cares).The band Is composed of me, my brother and Jordan Dare
posted by grex at 12:57 PM on July 12, 2006

Hey, fuck you too! Actually when the music started I didn't think I would be impressed, but your vocals are pretty strong. Do you have a pirate radio station near you? This is definately a candidate for that kind of air-play.
posted by snsranch at 5:24 PM on July 12, 2006

I'm glad you like it , unfortunately there's not much pirate radio in Canada.
posted by grex at 6:14 AM on July 13, 2006

I go the opposite way from snsranch— I really liked the beat, but the rapping kinda left me cold in a lot of spots, and I thought the chorus was a little too sophomoric. There were too many hallmarks of amatuer rap: offbeat rhyming, inconsistent meter, the use of cussing as explitive (filler), repetitive use of the same word... You might want to try rerecording the vocals with an ear toward more sparseness, and try to de-emo the chorus.
Again, really great beat.
posted by klangklangston at 7:36 AM on July 13, 2006

Oh, and getting it down to a solid three-and-a-half or four minutes would probably help too. Since there's no real narrative, you can cut the weaker stuff without having to rewrite everything.
posted by klangklangston at 7:37 AM on July 13, 2006

Yeah the rapping is kinda all over the place. It's probably due to the fact that none of us are really serious about rapping.
posted by grex at 8:10 AM on July 13, 2006

i like it.
posted by nitsuj at 12:57 AM on July 16, 2006

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