Vignette#2 - Widow's Weeds
March 7, 2010 3:13 AM
An observation on the bitterness of divorce - not, thankfully, from personal experience.
Took my shoes
Took my clothes
Took my money
Took my kids
Took my life
Now you're standing here
Dressed in widow's gear
Fuck off
There were lies
There were deals
There was......stuff
I didn't know too much about....stuff
You got what you need
Dressed in widow's weeds
So don't come here
To "make things clear"
You got what you need
Dressed in widow's weeds.
Took my shoes
Took my clothes
Took my money
Took my kids
Took my life
Now you're standing here
Dressed in widow's gear
Fuck off
There were lies
There were deals
There was......stuff
I didn't know too much about....stuff
You got what you need
Dressed in widow's weeds
So don't come here
To "make things clear"
You got what you need
Dressed in widow's weeds.
posted by MajorDundee (4 comments total)
Funny, man, I was writing a similar kind of song last night, but ended up getting pretty angry with the "subject matter" and went to be.
Warts and all, this is pretty good...enjoyable.
posted by snsranch at 5:52 PM on March 9, 2010
Warts and all, this is pretty good...enjoyable.
posted by snsranch at 5:52 PM on March 9, 2010
After the first half, I was ready to say I wasn't too into it. But then I came around at "...stuff." And the last three couplets (if that's what they're called) work really well for me. Both in terms of the writing and the delivery.
After listening five times, I'm really feeling it. Feels like a sketch, perhaps, but one that's substantive.
posted by edlundart at 8:59 PM on March 9, 2010
After listening five times, I'm really feeling it. Feels like a sketch, perhaps, but one that's substantive.
posted by edlundart at 8:59 PM on March 9, 2010
Thanks guys. Actually edlundart, it is pretty much a sketch (the ragged ending gives it away) but one that somehow seemed to resist "development" without losing the focus of it. I think this is an example of something I tried unsuccessfully to get going on MeFiMu a while back where unfinished ideas could be uploaded and if someone else had a flash of inspiration to take it further - great. Personally, I can't do any more with this.
posted by MajorDundee at 3:03 AM on March 10, 2010
posted by MajorDundee at 3:03 AM on March 10, 2010
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posted by MajorDundee at 3:17 AM on March 7, 2010