graffiti song

old/well-loved song. been meaning to throw this up for a while. jazzy ditty about the internetty world. needs a competent brass bit if anyone's interested.

found myself a pretty missy to sing my jazz/blues songs, sos I'm working on this one, this is the first recorded draft of an old song.
anyone wanna replace that kazoo?

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posted by es_de_bah (6 comments total)

s'always, lyrics:

mincing words, trying not to sound trite. write it off, tho it never comes off right. gotta bark, i gotta bark up a good fight, because i don't bite.

my pen's a sword but my voices just ain't no fist. i clear my throat and then i slur like i'm dead pissed. hope you fill in any words that you might have missed with the words you wished i'd said.

because the world just ain't a stage no more. it's a half-hinged, chipped paint men's room door. all the writing's on the wall and i'm locked in the stall, where my car-keys carve out poetry between all that filthy pageantry. between the racial slurs and phone numbers you'll find my masterpiece. anyway, that's where you'll find me.

you see the trouble is that me and honesty are never in the same room as lucidity. sincerity is just a symptom of whiskey, at least for me.

the only time when I am both sober and free is when locked doors afford me anonymity: a theme that seems to lend itself exclusively to graffiti.

every blank space is a canvass when you just want to be seen.
whoever sings screams the loudest surely will be king
I don't mean to scream but you've got to play the room
posted by es_de_bah at 10:58 PM on March 9, 2010

I like this a lot. If you are still working on it and you don't mind hearing suggestions, I'd suggest messing with those drums. Not changing what is played, but "postproducing" the sound, making it raunchier, playing with panning for the cymbals, that sort of stuff. That could give it something extra, though the song itself is great.
posted by micayetoca at 11:20 AM on March 10, 2010

Holy shit. Man, the vox and instrumentation are nailed down TIGHT! I turned the bass and mids up a little, but that's just my preference...I really love a prominent bass, and those lines are worth hearing, they really drive this.
posted by snsranch at 4:56 PM on March 10, 2010

This sounds pretty great. I like those intertwining vocals.

Woah! Sudden swerve at 3:25!

I dunno, I like that kazoo, myself. What were you thinking of replacing it with?
posted by Karlos the Jackal at 3:45 AM on March 11, 2010

proper horns. i'd love a sax or a muted trumpet...or maybe a real nice harmonica...
posted by es_de_bah at 9:00 AM on March 11, 2010

Interesting piece - liked it more and more as it went on. Like the vocal sound and performance - what makes you think you need another singer? You don't.

And the kazoo is fucking perfect man - don't change it. In fact, swap it with the guitar solo so it happens sooner. Seriously - I thought it worked fantastically well and added a really unusual vibe to the whole track.

Only const.crit - timing is pretty shaky in places. I thought it was going to fall over a couple of times.
posted by MajorDundee at 6:25 AM on March 13, 2010