January 3, 2010 11:17 PM

This is a love song I wrote for my girlfriend shortly after we met.

I only recently got the piano I needed to fill this thing out properly (thanks, Santa!). I intend to record drums for this as well, but wanted to post it here to get a little feedback first. It's got a few recording gaffs, but I think it gives you a fair idea of what I'm after.

Let me know what you think, would you? Thanks!

posted by Pecinpah (7 comments total)

This is a nice song. It feels like the guitar, piano and bass are all competing for space in the lower register. Can you transpose the piano (or maybe guitar) up to widen the harmony? Like the little bit of piano you play at the end, that might "fit" the entire song better...

Unless you're going for a dirge, in which case, perfect!
posted by abc123xyzinfinity at 9:41 AM on January 4, 2010

haha - no, not meant to be a dirge.

The piano bit at the end is actually the same piano part that's playing throughout the verse of the song, but I guess it gets hidden down among the other instruments. I may need to pull the bass back a bit.

Thanks for the input! Very helpful.
posted by Pecinpah at 10:10 AM on January 4, 2010

I like how to rhythm takes a few moments to gran onto as the listener. At least, I had to. This is really nice.
posted by ORthey at 11:39 AM on January 4, 2010

gran = grab.
posted by ORthey at 11:39 AM on January 4, 2010

This is great. I like love songs that aren't obvious and have a little more of a mix of feelings rather than just one emotion. Well done.
posted by Corduroy at 7:53 PM on January 5, 2010

Thanks, everyone, for your comments. Very encouraging!
posted by Pecinpah at 10:17 AM on January 6, 2010

Yeah, I like the herky-jerky rhythm a lot.

I dunno, I like that low piano -- I do agree that it and the bass kinda bump into each other, but maybe instead of transposing the piano, you could try pulling the bass out altogether? Maybe it isn't needed with that low piano. Or try transposing the bass up? (is that goofy?) If it was me, I might try dumping the bass and playing its part with a high glockenspiel.
posted by Karlos the Jackal at 4:23 AM on January 7, 2010

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