Slip or Fade

June 13, 2008 9:59 AM

Acoustic number in the works, just looking for some advice & feedback about this song (see description)

What I'm looking for-

do you like it in general?

if no, what bothers you (no comments about mixing, please, about the music)?

if yes, what is it about the song you like?

Is the lead guitar or bass too busy in your opinion?

Thanks, it's something I'm working on for an upcoming album, I appreciate any and all feedback


posted by Slash_fan (4 comments total) 1 user marked this as a favorite

Well, the lead guitar and the bass seem to be doing what they should be doing in a song like this, so no comments on that.

Since you asked, I think the keyboard line is halfway between a charming indie lo-fi thing and an incomplete professional thing. It's not lo-fi enough that it's charming and it's not interesting enough to sound like a finished piano line, in my opinion.

Other than that, perhaps you could add a slower or quieter middle-8 somewhere near the end, it would give it some nice change of pace and make it less repetitive.

Sorry to be so blunt, but you asked.
posted by micayetoca at 10:18 AM on June 13, 2008

The lead guitar freeform-y janlgy melodic thing throughout the song sounds like it was recorded in an entirely different time and place than the rest of the tracks, to my ears.
The bed track sounds like one session and the lead stuff sounds like an acoustic with a not-so-great pick-up recorded later.
I'd bury that stuff quite a bit and focus on bringing out the vocals which are lost in the mix at this point.
It seems like an okay bed track was recorded and then some stuff was overdubbed onto it.
It's a good song, I'd love to hear the focus shift to the lyrics and vocals, 'cause right now it seems like you're masking them a bit. Put them out front! Loud and Proud!
Keep going, it's clear you have some good shit.
posted by chococat at 10:05 PM on June 13, 2008

Man, I can't say much after mica and choco, (they are right on the money!) but I will say that you sound like you have everything you need. Great song and keep it up!
posted by snsranch at 3:12 PM on June 14, 2008

Yeah, I think the lead guitar is a little busy, during the verses, and sounds more "jammy" than "hooky" to me (I always prefer "hooky"). It makes me think that the guitarist is trying to keep himself amused; I'd tighten it up and make it a simple, fun riff, or just make it go away during the vocal sections altogether.

I don't have a problem with the bass -- I think it's cool.

The song as a whole is pretty solid and catchy.
posted by Karlos the Jackal at 1:30 AM on June 15, 2008

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